Thanks for the feedback, and yeah, I did mean to make it all one line. It was pretty late when I typed this so there's probably lots of errors that I'll go over later.
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Flawless pale skin,
Encasing a wild and crazy soul
That leaks,
Slowly but surely
From the little slashes upon her wrist.
A permanent crease,
Above the eyebrows,
(That tattletales on her inner blonde)
From worried nights,
Of Jake & Tanner.
Pudgy lips
From pouting
Laughing,
And brilliant thoughts
That escape
In moments of silence.
Now,
This pulchritudinous cat,
Lies blanched and ashen,
Laced with the
Stench
Of liquor
I hope you like it! Don't be too mean
Thanks for the feedback, and yeah, I did mean to make it all one line. It was pretty late when I typed this so there's probably lots of errors that I'll go over later.
I like it. I like the way it starts. Keep writing, keep flowing. You've got something special.
Pale
Skin,
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